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Train Ride

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"She won't forgive me, you know."  I looked over at the man sitting next to me on the train.  His brown hair was neat on his suit, and he was holding a fruit basket.   "I cheated on her."  I honestly had no idea who this guy was.  All I wanted to do was head to the Mall for some Lindt Chocolate and Ace Attorney.  Now it looked like I wouldn't be able to enjoy either.  I pressed the "next page" button on my Kindle.    "But this blonde… she was… well, nothing for your little ears."

I'm 20.

"Main Street Station" Came over the speakers. I couldn't leave yet, and this guy was creeping me out.  What did he want?  A quick glance in the bustle of riders entering and exiting showed I was alone.  Creeper.  

"Well, anyway, she found our sext, and now I have to make up to that c…. something I won't finish." Good, I hate swearing.  PLEASE, someone come in!   Where's security when you need it? I should have gotten off at Main Street Station.  "You have girlfriend troubles?"

"Er… no.  Asexual."  Maybe a little personal detail would throw him off.  Where was 12th street station?  Ah, I can't get off there… it's the weekend and no one gets off there anyway.  

"You reproduce by yourself? Care to show me?"

"No, it means I'm not interested in anything sexually."  Common mistake, but coming from this guy… and that LEER… Run, come on… next one after 12th street is China town.  Everyone leaves there! Besides, it's your stop anyway…

"That's a pity." No, it isn't.   "Are you sure I can't convince you that you just haven't met the right guy… or girl?"  Please, someone, help!  I'll have to remember to make sure I get on more crowded cars next time.

"12th street station" Thank GOODNESS!  I can get off at China town.  Ugh, why didn't anyone walk into this car… It can't be THIS hard to find this creepy.

"You didn't answer…" Did he really have to hold the basket like that?  Come on…
where's an escape?

"It's just like asking a gay guy if he wants to go straight. It doesn't work like that."  Why… why is he getting up like that?  YES!  We're pulling into the station!

"China Town" I'm free!  Come on… People stop pushing me… where is security? There's one!  Thank goodness they all wear that shade of blue.

"Can I help you ma'am?"

"Yeah, I would like to report an attempted sexual assault and a possible murder."
This is a "Flash Fiction" and it has to be somewhere between 150 and 600 words in this exercise. (This one clocks in at 424)
Inspired by me seeing a guy holding a fruitbasket on the train. I missed his train, looked like a young guy trying to impress a girl.

Not really this creepy pervert.

All characters are mine. PLEASE give me good feedback. This will be 10% of my grade.
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Blue-Demon-Hybrid's avatar
I love how real-life can inspire good works, even creepo-inspirations.